S.S. Rose

Amazing, Amazing, AMAZING!! Like, I want to frame this and hang it up in my room. Sorry, I have no constructive criticism, lilchoma, but quite frankly I don't care. I ...

This was fantastic....achingly beautiful and - and I simply cannot believe that you think you cannot write well!!! The only thing (nitpick-wise) is that "ach" in the first stanza should ...

Nice job! A very emotive piece of work. " Along with a life's confusion " just doesn't seem to flow right to me, perhaps you can tweak it a bit. ...

A pretty piece of poetry overall, but I'm sorry to say that a couple of garish grammatical errors make it decidedly less attractive. " Dinning " should be " Dining ...

Cloudy veil recoils the night The fiery stars with gold alight A moon antiquity could not tarnish Bold and lustrous orange above Lisping, aging, mourning leaves Congregate ‘round our patient ...

Hello there! A few grammatical errors here and there, I noticed. "Stinged" should be "stung" even if it messes up your rhyme scheme. I don't quite like your use of ...

Being new to this forum, I'm still working my reviewing process. But I shall try to be constructive: my first reaction to the piece was that it contains a myriad ...

Have you ever opened your eyes while underwater? Objects are blurred; colors and boundaries smeared like a toddler’s finger-paint. Sounds are elongated and slurred, muffled gurgles manipulated by th

Hmmm....pretty good, if this is, as you say, your "first attempt at poetry". The spelling errors ("oftem" should be "often"; "Gibrish" should be "Gibberish"; etc...) do, unfortunately, decrease the at

Altogether quite nicely done -- the message resonates clearly with anyone who has experienced bullying. I disagree, however, with "For she has lots to hide" in the third stanza. It ...